My Hortatory Expository Essay
The Effects of
Throwing Trash Everywhere
Trash is a big problem in our country.
As it can be seen, the
trash everywhere. Even though the government tries to struggle with this problem,
but it still cannot be solved. Why do people throw the trash everywhere? The
answers may be there are no place to throw it, or they do not know about the
damage can be caused by their action. It is time that people take a stand not to throw trash everywhere
for it can cause some problems.
Firstly, throwing the trash everywhere
can cause flood. When the rainy season is coming, all the trash that throw everywhere
will bring into the gutter or river. If there was too much water, the trash
will obstruct the flowing of water in the gutter. Then, the water will overflow
and will cause the flood. For instance, in rain season, Jakarta always has
problem about flood that caused by trash.
Secondly, throwing the trash everywhere
can cause some illness. Trash is a source of disease, either directly or
indirectly. Directly, trash is a place to breed for germ, bacteria, and
parasite. Whereas, indirectly trash is a home for rats, cockroaches, flies,
and mosquitoes. Pekalongankab.go.id says that there are some illness that is caused by
trash, for instance, diarrhea, dysentery, and malaria. Sometimes these illness
is ignored by people, but they are dangerous.
Thirdly, throwing the trash everywhere can
contaminate the water. The washing process of
solid waste
by water, especially by rainwater is the
source of the water
contamination, both surface water and
groundwater. As a result, a variety of water sources used for daily needs in a
residential area has been contaminated which resulted in a decrease level of human health. Water contamination
is not
only due to the
washing process solid waste, but
the biggest contaminator actually
comes from the wastewater
still contains chemicals of various kinds of
factories and other industries. These
substances are very disturbing and dangerous for
human.
Thus,
after knowing about the damage of throwing the trash everywhere, people should
put the trash in its place. Do not throw it into the gutter or river. Safe our
lives by considering about the trash.
In the first paragraph "Even though the government tries to struggle with this problem, but it still cannot be solved." I think "goverment tries" change with present perfect, "the goverment has tried". Thenk you
BalasHapusthe essay is completely good. but the introduction should be better if u put the question in the first paragraph as the beginning of introduction. good job girl... olait. dont forget to leave your comment too in my blog ya alhumairah-adel97.blogspot.com :)
BalasHapusthe essay is completely good. but the introduction should be better if u put the question in the first paragraph as the beginning of introduction. good job girl... olait. dont forget to leave your comment too in my blog ya alhumairah-adel97.blogspot.com :)
BalasHapusSinta your essay is Good :)
BalasHapusbut i think this sentence is not effective enough because it has no verb. "As it can be seen, the trash everywhere"
i think you need to change it to "As it can be seen, the trash is everywhere"
Thank you :)
Sinta your essay is good, but in the last sentence paragraph 1 "It is time that people take a stand not to throw trash everywhere for it can cause some problems". it better if you change it be " It is time that people take a stand not to throw the trash everywhere because it can make some problems".
BalasHapusPay attention in using punctuation after " by rainwater" you should put comma; ))
BalasHapussinta, i think you should add several ideas in concluding paragraph in order that it will be longer.
BalasHapusSinta, your essay is good, but i think you should add transition, such as it better if you add "finally" at the end.
BalasHapus